I know whatever you write will be a joy to read, but since you're soliciting suggestions... ;-)
1) I'm in total agreement with everyone re: Jim's POV when Leo was dying of CHFII. While reading Patty's description of Jim's desperation gave us a very clear picture of what he was going through, the angst junkie in me would love to see what was happening on the inside while he was freaking out on the outside.
2) This? '"All those times," Jim began in a low, raspy voice, "that I climbed into your bed after I took a shower?"
Leo had to make an effort to drag his eyes from the sight of Jim's hands washing his own pectoral muscles, the flow of bubbles streaming down his torso and over his forearms, curling around the base of his erect cock.
"I was in here thinking about you," Jim said. "Wishing you were in here with me, watching me." Jim moved his hands lower on his torso, making lazy x-es as he washed from side-to-side. "Wishing that it was your hands on me."'
Um...yeah.
3) The glimpses of Spock/Uhura you gave us were so sweet, I'd love to see your take on that relationship through Jim's eyes. Maybe the "I'll be monitoring your frequency" kiss on in the transporter room?
4) (And I cannot *believe* I'm suggesting this) Blue-eyed great-grandbabies.
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Date: 2010-02-16 09:02 pm (UTC)1) I'm in total agreement with everyone re: Jim's POV when Leo was dying of CHFII. While reading Patty's description of Jim's desperation gave us a very clear picture of what he was going through, the angst junkie in me would love to see what was happening on the inside while he was freaking out on the outside.
2) This?
'"All those times," Jim began in a low, raspy voice, "that I climbed into your bed after I took a shower?"
Leo had to make an effort to drag his eyes from the sight of Jim's hands washing his own pectoral muscles, the flow of bubbles streaming down his torso and over his forearms, curling around the base of his erect cock.
"I was in here thinking about you," Jim said. "Wishing you were in here with me, watching me." Jim moved his hands lower on his torso, making lazy x-es as he washed from side-to-side. "Wishing that it was your hands on me."'
Um...yeah.
3) The glimpses of Spock/Uhura you gave us were so sweet, I'd love to see your take on that relationship through Jim's eyes. Maybe the "I'll be monitoring your frequency" kiss on in the transporter room?
4) (And I cannot *believe* I'm suggesting this) Blue-eyed great-grandbabies.
That is all.