http://taverl.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] taverl.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] ceres_libera 2009-11-28 05:24 am (UTC)

Proofreading note

In this sentence:
Leo was heading to get into the gear necessary to go into the room when he saw Nyota standing at the window across the way, staring into the hot room, her eyes wrapped around her middle as if she were hugging herself.

I think you mean "arms wrapped around her middle" not eyes.

Though in the ST 'verse, anything is possible! :-)

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